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Typos and grammar
In BUG REPORTS- Singleplayer
jbrown
Aug 02, 2019
Hyun says, "However we're not going to deliver your payment to you." Maybe try this, "However, we're not going to deliver your payment to you." Hyun says, "If you need help with anything else, don't ask me just go to the library." Maybe try this, "If you need help with anything else, don't ask me. Just go to the library." Meeting Jefe for the first time. He says, "Talk to Jefe when you are ready to learn boss." Maybe try this, "Talk to Jefe when you are ready to learn, Boss." Jefe says, "Ok boss let me show you how to make tools." Maybe try this, "OK, Boss, let me show you how to make tools." Jefe says, "So you ready for me to teach about blacksmithing?" Maybe try this, "So are you ready for me to teach you about blacksmithing?" Jefe says, "Each tool is made from different materials, the better the metal, the stronger the tool, and it will not break as easily." Maybe try this, "Each tool is made from different materials. The better the metal, the stronger the tool, and then it will not break as easily." Jefe says, "Also depending on what material the tool is made of will require more energy to use." Maybe try this, "Also, depending on what material the tool is made of, it will require more or less energy to use." Jefe says, "I sell standard tools, but if you find stronger ores, buy an anvil and a smelt you can make your own." Maybe try this, "I sell standard tools. But if you find stronger ores, you can buy an anvil and smelter so you can make your own." (Smelt is a fish) Jefe says, "Here let me show you how you can forge your own tools." Maybe try this, "Here. Let me show you how you can forge your own tools." Jefe says, "Next let's make a axe." Maybe try this, "Next, let's make an axe." Jefe says, "But the better the tool the less energy it will use." Maybe try this, "But the better the tool, the less energy it will use." Jefe says, "You also, need to buy your own anvil and smelter to make your own tools." Maybe try this, "If you want to make your own tools, you will need to buy your own anvil and smelter."
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Typos and grammar
In BUG REPORTS- Singleplayer
jbrown
Aug 01, 2019
Tessa's first comment, upon greeting me in the square: "Oh um excuse me are you <target name>?" Maybe try this? "Oh, um, excuse me. Are you <targetname>?" Tessa's second comment: "My name is Tessa I was sent to welcome you." Maybe try this? "My name is Tessa. I was sent to welcome you." Tessa's statement, "As promised in the ad, we'll be giving you the property on a major discount." I think you mean, "As promised in the ad, we'll be giving you a major discount on the property." Tessa: "I'm so sorry am I rambling?" Maybe try this.... "I'm so sorry! Am I rambling?" Tessa says, "I'm rambling again aren't I?" needs a comma... "I'm rambling again, aren't I?" Tessa says, "When you're done looking at the map please come to the mayor's office." Maybe try this, "When you're done looking at the map, please come by the mayor's office." Tessa says, "Ok see you." Maybe try this, "Okay, see you!" Meeting Julian the Mayor, "Why hellloooo there." Maybe try this, "Why, hellloooo there!" Julian says, "I'm sure you are eager to start exploring the town so let me get you set up." Just needs a comma --- "I'm sure you are eager to start exploring the town, so let me get you set up." Julian says, "You will have to pay it back, before you decide to expand." I think you may mean, "You will have to pay it back, before you are able to expand." (I've already decided to expand!" :) Julian says, "Alright, go right ahead and pick which one you would like." How about this? "All right, go right ahead and pick out which property you would like." Julian says, "Hmmm there's quite a bit for you to learn so..." Maybe try this, "Hmmm. There's quite a bit for you to learn, so...." Julian says, "Here take this journal." Maybe try this, "Here. Take this journal." Julian says, "Today you can take your time getting use to the town." Maybe try this, "Today, you can take your time getting used to the town." Julian says, "However, before you leave the town to go exploring, please complete most of these tasks on the journal and get your farm started." Maybe try this, "It's important for you to get your farm started, so please complete most of the tasks in the journal before you leave town to go exploring." Julian says, "What's the farming quota?" Maybe try this, "What's the farming quota, you ask?" Julian says, "For each item you complete on the list I'll send you a bonus payment in the mail." Maybe try this -- "For each item on the list that you complete, I'll send you a bonus payment in the mail." Meeting Orpheus: Orpheus says, "Tch you look pathetic." Maybe try this, "Tch! You look pathetic!" Orpheus says, "My name is Orpheus, Pumpkinvale's main farmer." Maybe try this, "I'm Orpheus, Pumpkinvale's main farmer." i Orpheus says, "Well when you're ready let's get this over with." Maybe try this, "Well, when you're ready, let's get this over with!" Orpheus says, "You don't even know the basics of how it even works." Maybe try this, "You don't even know the basics of how this works!" Orpheus says, "They're half-busted so it's not like I want 'em." Maybe try this, "They're half-busted, so it's not like I want 'em." Orpheus says, "What are you waiting for, take out your hoe from your inventory and place a plot." Maybe try this, "What are you waiting for? Take your hoe out of your inventory and place a plot." Orpheus (after I plant) says, "Well I guess you didn't do too bad." Maybe try this, "Well, I guess you didn't do too badly." Orpheus says, "Oh and here is a sickle to clear out the weeds." Maybe try this, "Oh! And here is a sickle to clear out the weeds." Orpheus says, "If you manage to grow anything you can sell it by putting it in the shipping bin infront of your property." Maybe try this, "If you manage to grow anything, you can sell it by putting it in the shipping bin in front of your property." Orpheus says, "It'll get picked up the same day and you receive your payment in the mail." Maybe try this, "It'll get picked up the same day, and you'll receive your payment in the mail." (Receive payment when? Right away? The next day?") Orpheus says, "If you forgot how to do anything just go to the library." Maybe try this, "If you forget how to do anything, just go to the library." Meeting Hyun. She says, "Oh yeah the mayor asked me to tell you how the mail works." Maybe try this, "Oh yeah, the mayor asked me to tell you how the mail works." Hyun says, "When you're ready I guess you can talk to me again." Maybe try this, "When you're ready, I guess you can talk to me again." Hyun says, "When you enter the post office to the right is the ATM is against the wall." Maybe try this, "When you enter the post office, to the right is the ATM, against the wall." Hyun says, "Oh and one more thing." Maybe try this, "Oh, and one more thing!" Hyun says, "If you need to sell anything, we put a shipping bin infront of your property." Maybe try this, "If you need to sell anything, we put a shipping bin in front of your property."
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